There was that time when the editor saved the
medical professional.
As a physician assistant, I enjoy having medical
aspects in my story. But even medical folks can slip up and have errors in our
fiction.
I have a scene where my heroine gets head trauma and
wakes up later in the clutches of the villain. The freelance editor, Ben Wolf,
wondered about that. He had read that if there was significant time of loss of
consciousness (LOC), then it suggested a serious injury that would be hard for
the victim to bounce right back from to be active.
One of my pet peeves is when characters are injured
and recover too fast, so I had to look into this again.
Basically, my heroine suffered a concussion, also
known as a Traumatic Brain Injury (TBI). Symptoms of a concussion can include
headache, confusion, dizziness, visual changes, a blunted affect, and may or
may not include LOC. (People always flash lights in pupils to check for
concussion. If the pupils are affected, it is a serious sign and they won't be
up and active soon.)
LOC usually is only for a few minutes, and as my
editor noted, will mean a much more severe injury if it lasts for hours.
Blast. Foiled by the editor.
Except, you can use the amnesia angle.
A concussion with LOC may have retrograde (before
the incident) or antegrade (after the incident) amnesia. According to one
research article, the antegrade amnesia can last for a few hours after the
incident. I can attest – I had a concussion in 5th grade and couldn’t
remember a couple hours afterwards.
So if you need your protagonist to be out of it for
a while, keep the actual LOC on the short side and use the amnesia angle to get
you where you need to be. The victim may be incoherent, unsteady, with a blank
expression during this time. Use these symptoms to add drama to the situation.
When your protagonist comes to, it is actually the
end of antegrade amnesia. I remember with my concussion it was like I
"woke up" after lunch during our quiet reading time at school. I was
confused, unsure of what happened. I could remember part of the morning, but
about two hours was blank. I even found a goose egg on my head later, but I
didn't know how it got there.
So that was my work around. My heroine didn't have
LOC the whole time. But there was enough injury to cause confusion and amnesia,
keeping her from attempting escape. There you go Ben. A few minor tweaks, and
all is well. Except for my heroine, who's tied up and threatened. But that's
another story.
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Jason loves good
stories and wants to use words to make a difference. When he's not writing,
playing soccer, or losing in fantasy football, he works as a physician
assistant in southeast Idaho. He also tries to keep up with his awesome wife,
three high-energy boys, and his little princess. He writes suspense and YA
supernatural, and likes to use his medical experience to punch up the stories.
You can find him on Twitter @JasonCJoyner or his blog at www.jasoncjoyner.com/blog.
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